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Mary Sue TEST - 15 questions by Aqua999 Mary Sue TEST - 15 questions by Aqua999
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EDIT: Popularity of this ran out of my control. I expected maybe 10 people to use the test, but boom, I posted it today and it's over 10000 downloads already. So before you start complaining just listen:
I was pissed off by a Mary Sue tossed into my fav canon, so I created this 2-minutes-to-fix-up silly Mary Sue Test and posted it here because I thought maybe SOMEONE will appreciate. But now that you all came her and told me either that it lacks something or that it's perfect, let me admit:
This test isn't perfect. It have a lot of flaws, grammar mistakes and lacks of questions, for example about personality, natural talents, and some questions may be even neccesary, because if you don't put a said feature along with several others they don't make a Mary Sue at all. I KNOW, 'KAY?
If you enjoy - and as far as I see most of you does enjoy - I'm glad, have fun, learn something if there's anything the test can teach you, just don't take it too seriously. It doesn't work for ALL kind of canons, stories and characters. And you know what? You can score 40 and more points here and still have an awesome character, if you're only cepable of keeping them realistic. And you can have a huge null of points and have as awesome character too. It's not about points, it's not about you OC's score, it about what you can do with it. I don't give a shit about math!

I have issues with fixing the main file of this deviation, but once we're on the subject, and you want to know if your OC is a Mary Sue/Gary Stu, ask yoursefl few more questions. Since the test is for just a little-Mary-Suists not for extra huge Mary Sue makers, answer the following:
:bulletred: Does other characters act different in your OC's presence? I don't mean just looking away, but totally twisting their personalities?
:bulletred: Does your character have 3 or more well-developed talents that she didn't spend loooong time training?
:bulletred: Is your character having only either friends or enemies, and no people who just don't care?
:bulletred: Did your character change lifes of many on her/his own?


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The-Very-Fancy-Horse Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2016  New Deviant
I'm doing my OC Raven

1. No.
2. Does it count if he's a cat and that's what cats do? I don't think so :T (Kitten's eyes change from blue to yellow)
3. Yes to your first question, no to your second.
4. No
5. No
6. C
7. No
8. No. He did once though, but he technically fled the battle.
9. No
10. Yes...
11. No
12. No
13. Not really for his species.
14. No
15. No

6 points. Thank goodness.
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PollykRose34 Featured By Owner Edited Apr 5, 2016  Student General Artist
Pollyk says:
1. Yes! PINKY!!!
2. Wat?
3. Yes, because i'm a powerpuff, this is normal at our PPG universe. Emilly and Louzie always tell me i'm the "Strongest" but i'm not sure...
4. Nope.
5. No.
6. C
7. What??? I'm not Jesus!
8. I think yes because i'm who represent my creator, and i was the first character she creates.
9. Like Louzie and Emilly, i can't fight alone.
10. My creator don't know what to do about it, so, still no.
11. I'm not a murder, a crazy or a yandere. I'LL NEVER KILL SOMEONE!!!
12. Louzie says that i save her life buying her... This is avaliable?
13. Mmm... Nothing :D
14. Nop.
15. XD NO!
TOTAL: 10 '-' I'll work more in her XD

Louzie says:
1. Dark red
2. No.
3. Yes... And no
4. No.
5. No. Ew. 
6. B
7. I'm still dead, i'm a ghost, but at the sunshine of the sun, i look like a normal human. This is a "Yes"?
8.  Noo.
9. Pollyk already said.
10. No.
11. NoOoOoOo.
12. No.
13. Wolf ears.
14. no
15. ... ? No.
TOTAL: 9... ugh.
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Artizdak Featured By Owner Edited Mar 16, 2016
Ok, I'll do it! I'll use a TLOS OC for this one.

1. Nope, just blonde hair.
2. No.
3. There are WAAAAAY too many to list... 2
4. Probably not, but she's more than likely to be interested in them.
5. Yes, and she's already married... 3
6. It's not really tragic, it's well known, and it's far from regular. ?
7. Her heart stopped beating, but she stopped herself from dying. I guess that counts. (8)
8. No, just a side character.
9. Well, she is now strong enough to kill the grim reaper with her bare hands. (12)
10. Aside from the one she married, no else is stupid enough to do so. (16)
11. yes. (17)
12. Yes. (18)
13. No, just a human.
14. NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!
15. They don't fight, they ask her nicely...

18 points, I figured it'd be a tad higher. Oh well. Wait, more questions!

16. If so, it's usually out of fear.
17. At her level, if she wants a well developed talent, she can just demand it and it shall be so.
18. No, she has a mix of each just like anyone else.
19. I wouldn't say many, but there are a few people.
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Abraxas-Baskerville Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016
Okay, lemme see where my Character Abraxas lands.

1. White hair with around 30, having them from birth? Counts.
    2

2. His eye doesn't change over time, only when he switches between human and demonic form.
    2

3. For human standards: no doubt his magic and being undead. For inhuman standards: He does blast off the devil with one laser if he wants to...
    4

4. He is quite charismatic, but nope. No romantic feelings towards him.
    4

5. He isn't interested in romance.
    4

6. He died though hanging, burning, dismemberment and having his organs severed from his body. Self-explanatory.
    7

7. He didn't come back on his own, free will. He did kill the necromancer afterwards. Let's say 3 outta 5.
    10

8. Not the protagonist, if that's the point. Rather the villain. Still counts.
    16

9. Not in a fair battle... but he doesn't play fair.
    20

10. The hero, duh.
    24

11. Bad guy/Zombie-like demon... self-explanatory.
    25

12. Nah.
    25

13. Human: Nope. Demon: Rotten flesh, rotten wings, constantly bleeding missing eye... Not for demon standards.
    25

14. Demon with a human body... No.
    25

15. Only countless to see him dead....
    25

What is the result?
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ThatDroplet Featured By Owner Edited Mar 5, 2016  New Deviant Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, I'll do myself as a boy or just totally myself since I don't have OC and I don't like creating them Kao Emoji-43(Sad waving) [V3] 

1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2
- Well, is hair are blue but those are dyed. They are naturaly blond.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4
- In the summer they're more bright but, it's because of the sun. I don't think thats on their own or special ( ' o ' ) . 

 3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2
- Eating like a f'king beast, + 2

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
- Only douchebag.  + 2

5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1
- Does it include anime waifu? +1

6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, treumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) Regular +0
- Well, it's almost regular. + 1 I think.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
- Not yet!

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6
- No. NO.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4
- He can't even run. 

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4
- My mother. + 4

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
- ..... + 1

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1
- Nahhhh 

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature
- I'm 100% human.
 
14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race
- Omg it would be awesoooooooome!

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC join them? +3  
- Cleaning team and Sleeping team. + 3

TOTAL: 14

OH MY GOD. I HAVE MARY SUE POINT IN MY D.N.A Nickderp 
Kill me
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Tettei Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2016  New Deviant Hobbyist General Artist
I'm gonna do this for Alex and Freya from my DeviantArt stories.

Alex first.

1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2

He has black hair, so no. No points.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4

No, and it'll never happen. Period.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a conon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?

He knows a variety of martial arts and is a crack shot with his Colt .45, and has knowledge of general anatomy, medicine, and survival skills. All those together sound incredibly OP, but they're not super or unnatural.

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2

So far, aside from his family, who we've only hear over the phone, the only other characters he knows are Freya and an unnamed giant who got killed. That's less than two characters to be romantically interested in him, assuming Freya even is (which is probably unlikely, for reasons obvious to my (currently very few) readers).

5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1

There have been hints with Freya, but for the aforementioned obvious reasons, it looks unlikely anything will come of it so far.

6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, treumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) Regular +0

Not his deep past, but recent... he's given up on hope of life outside of his parent's ranch, been trained and trained himself to be a soldier in defense of said ranch in preparation of doomsday, and I haven't written this yet, but expects that life to kill him before he reaches 30. I'd call that option A. 3 points.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5

See my answer for the hair/eye color one.

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6

Yes, because he IS the main character of the story. It's told from his first person perspective and everything. Without him, there is no main character. 9 points.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

Remember that unnamed giant that got killed? Yeah, that was him. 13 points.

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4

Same answer as my hair/eye color and rise from dead answers.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1

Again, remember the giant. 14 points.

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1

That giant he killed? He was about to rape Freya. I'd say that counts. 15 points.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature

Do I even need to say it?

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race

...

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3

...

Final score: 15 points.

11-20 Your OC is an interesting character with no overdose

Batman and Deathstroke levels of badassery isn't overdose? OK then. Now for Freya.


1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2

She has orange hair, basically ginger, so no.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4

Same answer as Alex. You know what? I'm just gonna say "potato" whenever I give this answer.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a conon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?

Depends. Among other giants, her only special power would be being female. If she's among humans... she's a freakin' 100 foot tall giantess. Um... I'm gonna go with no.

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2

Possibly Alex, but it's unlikely anything will ever come of it (like I said earlier). There's also any male giant she may come across, but because giantesses are so rare in that universe, it's less romance, more a release of libido than anything else.

5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1

She's very friendly, but has never shown any sort of romantic interest in anyone.

6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, treumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) Regular +0

She left behind her home and father in Scotland at his [her father's] request, seeking out isolation from other giants to avoid being used as a piece of meat. I'd call that option A. 3 points.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5

May or may not happen in the future, but so far, not yet.

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6

She does become a co-MC along with Alex whenever he's with her, but because the story's told from his first person perspective, I'd say no because when it's not the both of them, it's him. But I do think of her as the more interesting character.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

What the hell is stronger than a 100 foot tall giantess?

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4

Not exactly, but she does have to avoid most if not all male giants. Easier than you think, as giants as a species are rare, not just females. Ladies are just even more rare.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1

She did assist in that aforementioned giant. 4 points.

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1

For as well as Alex was doing in that fight, there's no doubt he would've been killed had Freya not intervened. 5 points.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature

Yeah, I just said she's gin-- *shot* Oh, come on! Jeremy Clarkson from Top Gear gets to make that joke! But seriously, no.

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race

She's a giantess, but not a mix of giantess and anything else.

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3

Potato.

Final score: 5 points.

0-10 You'd rather treavel to the moon and back again than create a Mary Sue on purpose

I honestly expected higher. For her and him. *notices other questions* Maybe this'll fix that.

Does other characters act different in your OC's presence? I don't mean just looking away, but totally twisting their personalities?

Not really, not that many other characters to act different. This applies to both.

Does your character have 3 or more well-developed talents that she didn't spend loooong time training?

Freya, no. Alex, since we're talking multiple survival skills, martial arts, and firearm handling, I wouldn't really call less than five years a loooong time.

Is your character having only either friends or enemies, and no people who just don't care?

Neither of them really know a lot of people. Freya, it's only Alex and her father, so no. Alex, there's just Freya and his family. There are the others in his martial arts classes I'd imagine, but since we don't really spend any time there with him, I don't think they'd count. So no for him as well.

Did your character change lifes of many on her/his own?


No for both.

So Aqua, how do those last 4 questions affect score?
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TDArulesclub4 Featured By Owner Edited Feb 16, 2016  Student General Artist
What if it's an anthro?
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Aqua999 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
There's no test that fits every kind of reality. There's need to be a specific test for anthro.
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Rurudyne Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2016

Okay, let me apply this to Magnus, the principal character in my Transformers: Genesis novels…



1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2



Cybertronians having hair would be unusual … so, no. No points.



2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4



Magnus’ eyes are “command grade” optics as with all his series, red, a color later associated with Decepticons. In the story, when he utilized the Star of Cybertron (see special powers) they turn green … but this is only transitory. No points.



3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2

If it's a canon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?



He is in possession of the Star of Cybertron, though he is unaware of it for much of the story. As it’s a bot-meets-Cybertron story, he’s a just-boot, being unaware is not a big deal. But having the SoC is a big deal … it had to be because the first novels are really about ancient Cybertron and without the abilities it gives, and what goes with just having it, there could not be the same bot-meets-Cybertron story.



It may not make him “stronger”, but, yeah, +2 points … and that’s not much considering….



4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2



“Romance” and “clueless” and Magnus … well, Magnus at one point asks his doctor, who is a femme, why some are femmes and some are mechs. He is at that point under the delusion that femmes have a mind control power because of something that a brother of his said that he didn’t understand at all…



The boy gets into some comedic situations because he is so clueless … so he really deserved the 2 points.



5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1

He has developed a crush on his femme doctor and by the end of the second book seems like he might be falling for an alien femme called From Me … so 1 point.



6. Your character's past is:

a) Tragic, treumatic +3

b) Mysterious, unknown +4

c) Regular +0



I’ll take “mysterious” for 4 points … but it was for a good cause.



7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5



No.



8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6



My idea of telling these stories is that they exist within the empty spaces of the cartoon canon, but Magnus’ storyline is to eventually lead to where the G1 cartoon started, and as he’s obviously not in the G1 cartoon… no points.



9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4



He spends a lot of time running in combat when faced with overwhelming odds. No points.



10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4



Only the jokes that will follow him for years because of how he reacts to a certain femme and also something he says in a hall. No points.



11. Did your character kill anyone? +1



Yes. you don’t specify if they have to be important or if there’s no good excuse so 1 point.



12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1



Yeah … 1 point



13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature



At one point he ponders some at a chassis modification shop, but only gets relatively small decorative horns, which are not unusual among Cybertronians. No points.



14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race



No. No points.



15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3



No. no points.



TOTAL: 11 points as of the two novels, Genesis and Forgotten Wars



Probably deserves a few more points for being the brunt of gender related comedy on a world where they don’t really know why gender exists….

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123leyang321 Featured By Owner Edited Jan 25, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice test. Of course it's hard to create an absolute extensive test, but those questions are already more than enough to figure out the most annoying traits of a Mary Sue character.
I absolutely want to avoid ever creating one. I like my OCs to be balanced. Not only that, but I never make my OCs main characters, they're always only supportive characters, if they ever get some spotlight, it'd be for a very short time.

I'll go for it with my two fav OCs, I'll have them as :bulletgreen: and :bulletblue: for identification of each one.
EDIT: adding a third one, :bulletyellow:.

1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) + 2
So, the thing is, the canon I'm writing for has all characters with unnatural hair and eye colors, so that's a common trait in the canon and it's nothing special, then I guess whether they do have different hair color or not wouldn't matter, so this wouldn't count.
:bulletgreen: Yes, but everyone in the canon does.
:bulletblue: Same thing.
:bulletyellow: Well, he'd probably be the non ordinary thing in that universe. But the thing is, there is a whole canon faction of characters that look exactly like him, so, no.

2. Did your character's hair/eyes change color over time on their own? +4
:bulletgreen: I'd not say on their own. This OC has a curse and during the time he's cursed he has a certain hair/eye/skin color. In my story he'll be rid of the curse and go back to normal and will forever remain normal, so... No.
:bulletblue: No. They'll always be the same color.
:bulletyellow: No.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a canon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?
:bulletgreen: Not naturally. He got his powers because of a certain artifact that got him cursed. In fact, he's aiming to get rid of those powers, lmao. But since he has powers while cursed, I'll add the points.
:bulletblue: He doesn't have powers, but he is a very skilled fighter, supposed to be the master of the masters... And yet he'll be a mere supporting character, lol. Nobody will see him fight. XD I guess I should add points on this one, though.
:bulletyellow: No.

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
:bulletgreen: No, only one person.
:bulletblue: Same thing.
:bulletyellow: No romance for this guy.

5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1
:bulletgreen: No, he's only interested in the very person who is also interested in him.
:bulletblue: Pretty much the same thing, but he might have a slight platonic affection towards a canon character because she reminds him of this person he likes. Yet, this canon character already kind of has a love interest of her own and he won't dare get between them. So, no.
:bulletyellow: No love interest.

6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, traumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) Regular +0
:bulletgreen: Hm... More like traumatic, I guess. I mean, it's not regular, nor mysterious. But it's nothing really shocking. The character got cursed when trying to save his homeland, that's all. The curse made him almost immortal in the "how long can you live" aspect, and after watching his loved ones die so many times he wants to get rid of it and die normally like everyone else.
:bulletblue: This one is tragic. To be exact, this character is dead and appears in the form of a spirit the whole time, with exception of flashbacks.
:bulletyellow: His past would most likely be regular for someone of his faction. However, there'll be quite a nice change, which won't be part of his past, so... Regular.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
:bulletgreen: No, he's alive.
:bulletblue: No, he died and can be summoned as a spirit for consultation and guidance, that's all.
:bulletyellow: No.

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6
:bulletgreen: No, he'll only appear in, like, 3 occasions in the whole story.
:bulletblue: While he will travel with the main group for a little while (since they're helping him get to the spiritual world) he's not a main character. Only supportive.
:bulletyellow: He's a recurrent character, only will appear in few occasions.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4
:bulletgreen: While cursed he probably could hold some enemies off, but not the strongest enemies. Without the curse he's pretty much an ordinary fighter.
:bulletblue: With his skills he could last a while, but since he's only a fighter and doesn't have any magic, he'd not be able to beat them.
:bulletyellow: He is very cunning, he might outsmart some, but not fight them down. He's not that strong.

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4
:bulletgreen: No.
:bulletblue: Not really. He killed a powerful enemy once, but because some events happened that it was him finishing them off. Then he died after a while. Never had a personal enemy.
:bulletyellow: Not a nemesis. The thing is, this character is from a faction that is on the villains' side, however, he and some others will want to get out of there, and of course the villains will want them dead for betraying them. So, no.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
:bulletgreen: No.
:bulletblue: Only once and immensely regretted it, to the point he swore never to fight again.
:bulletyellow: Probably yes.

12. Did your character save somebody's life? +1
:bulletgreen: Technically, yes, since he managed to make his homeland win a war.
:bulletblue: Yes, since he killed an enemy that was on a killing spree.
:bulletyellow: After the big change in his life he will.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature
:bulletgreen: Not really, he looks like an ordinary human, unless his curse counts.
:bulletblue: He looks like an ordinary human as well, though he is a ghost since he's dead.
:bulletyellow: Well, he is part of a faction that already exists in the canon. So the design isn't even mine. They look like a mix of ninjas and mummies, with glowing eyes. Would that even count when it's from the canon itself?

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race
:bulletgreen: No. He's fully human.
:bulletblue: Human too.
:bulletyellow: He's not a mix of races. He'd be a single race, if that race isn't some kind of mutated human. The canon never explained what the heck are they. But I guess he might get a point for not being an ordinary human being.

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3
:bulletgreen: No. He only allied himself with the good guys because he sympathized with their cause.
:bulletblue: Same thing.
:bulletyellow: No. He will leave the dark side and join the good side. But nobody is requesting him to join.

Now let's see the total.
:bulletgreen: 6 (or 7 if question 13 counts)
:bulletblue: 7 (or 8 if question 13 counts)
:bulletyellow: 3 (LOL!)

Therefore, the result is:
0-10 You'd rather travel to the moon and back again than create a Mary Sue on purpose.

Cool, I'm happy with that. XD
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Aqua999 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
What canon are they for?
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123leyang321 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
A cartoon called Storm Hawks.

It takes place in a world made of very high mountains, where people have to travel around using airships and flying motorcycles. :P
The humans have all kinds of hair/eye color, but the skin color is normal. There are other humanoid races too, like fish-people (not mermaids), coyote-people, lizard-people, rhino-people, giants, those ninja/mummies things, etc.

In the end of the cartoon the main characters and the main villain travel to another... "Dimension", because the heroes are chasing after the bad guy (well, girl).

My story takes place right after they get to this new unexplored place (which by the canon itself is supposed to be an advanced place with high tech stuff and mystical creatures). My idea was to write a possible story that could have happened there, because the world had so much potential, I felt just sad it was abandoned like that.

I do have my own original ideas for universes and plots, though.
They'll be comics and not written pieces. And none of the characters in those are abnormal, unless it's common in the universe I make (which is usually a rare case). I prefer balanced characters. Not even enemies should be overpowered. I prefer enemies with wits than power. It's much more interesting to go for a battle of outsmarting than of your usual Superman vs some OP enemy battle.
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kittylaughs Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2016
1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2 
 No. Her hair is black.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4
 Her eyes are purple, but they don't change. So no.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a canon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'? 
 She's has pretty strong supernatural powers. Yes.

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
 No.

5. Does your character have love interests in two or more people? +1 
 No.

6. Your character's past is: 
a) Tragic, traumatic +3 
b) Mysterious, unknown +4 
c) Regular +0

 No. But she did have a bossy teen sister.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5 
 No.

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6 
 No. She's ONE of the main character of my GAoBaM AT. But still no.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4 
 Yes. No one should make her mad, or they will have a bad day.

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4 
 Yes. She has her own rivals and enemies.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1 
 No. Not yet.

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1 
 Yes. She has.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature
 Yes. Only purple eyes. Only in human form

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race 
 Her natural species is a Merdrake, but she can shape shift into a human. Yes

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC join them? +3 
 No.

11-20 Your OC is an interesting character with no overdose
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Mantoisful Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2016
this is my report 

0
I don't understand, but I assume 4
0
0
0
3
5
LOL NO
No. she fights like a bitch. not because she's a girl.
4
1
1
well for the race, no. but for a human LOL 9000
0
0
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Timewap1 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2015
"There is no such thing as bad characters. Only bad writers".

All these questions are irrelevant because traits are not the signs of a Mary Sue.
They are possible signs for bad writing though... And that's the major difference.

What really defines a Mary Sue is not what they are but why they are. As in, is this character here for the story or to stroke the ego of the writer?

Any story where the writer hijacks someone else's story or even their own for their own means is just writing fanfiction at that point.

And advice like this is just a knee jerk response to badly written stories write written badly.
Which is also detrimental to novice or even good writers from taking chances and improving their craft through mistakes.

I actually have my own piece about writing characters which is probably better advice since I can't really write those details here.

I've decided to respond to as many of these as possible because... it seems no one actually understands the difference between bad writing and every day creativity, even if the ideas are recycled.

I just hope most of your viewers take time to read these responses, it's probably the best advice they'll get.
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123leyang321 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
So, I'll agree with this as by taking this test only for fun (I like my characters as they are because I've written great background for them that makes them fit) I noticed many things there wouldn't apply/count for them.

Though there's one thing it's more than obvious that a Mary Sue character would be, as in, in general: an absolutely overpowered (which doesn't have to be raw power, it could be any trait that's way too spectacular and goes beyond anything in the whole universe you're creating) character that draws too much attention (whether it's because they have too many love interests or villains and heroes alike begging them to join their side doesn't really matter).
The Mary Sue steals the spotlight of other characters in a ridiculous way. Avoiding that is fairly easy, it just needs some common sense of what's plain silly and what's a nicely written character.
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Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016
Well said.
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123leyang321 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, thanks. :)
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ProspitFox Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016  Student Digital Artist
Thats actually a really good point! I've read a lot of things with characters that some people would thnk of as "mary sues" (tragic backstory, crazy powers, stuff like that) but because the characters were still well written and actually FIT in the story, it still worked! spending time trying to figure out if my characters are mary sues instead of just writing anyways and progressing by actually working is probably the worst possible thing for my writing.
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Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
Yes!!!

Changing the world one crappy writer at a time!

No offense :P
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ProspitFox Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016  Student Digital Artist
haha, none taken. I'll get better some day!
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Arratra Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
This should come in handy.
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DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2015
1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2

(OoC: Is black an unnatural hair colour?)

0

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4

(OoC: They change sometimes, specifically when he's really worked up, but they don't change permanently)

0

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a conon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?

(OoC: Well, he and my half-OC travel between franchises, so of course he has unnatural powers. But usually, they're not on the scale that makes him stronger than most. He mostly relies on his skills and wit, anyway)

2

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2

(OoC: Romantic? No. Physical? Quite a few. I plan on having people fall for him, but I plan on everyone falling out of it after they get to see his darker side. All except one, which is the one he's interested in)

2

5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1

(OoC: I don't believe polygamy is right in anyway, at least for humans. Animals, they only aim for the survival of their species. We humans are monogamous by nature)

2

6. Your character's past is:
a) Tragic, treumatic +3
b) Mysterious, unknown +4
c) Regular +0

(OoC: I plan on it being mostly mysterious but obviously tragic and traumatic. That probably earns me both, right?)

9

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5

(OoC: Who does that?!)

9

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6

(OoC: Did I mention that he travels between franchises? And that he doesn't stick around for very long? Pretty sure that earns me no points on this one, right?)

9

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

(OoC: Pretty much, yeah. Doesn't mean he's invincible, though; he's very skilled and quite powerful, but there are people who'll keep him on his toes and others that actually can kill him. They just either are outsmarted by him or...... are crazy lunatics that barely take anything seriously)

:icondeadpool--plz::iconsaysplz:Thank you!:iconsays-endplz:

13

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4

(OoC: When you travel between franchises, helping everywhere you could while passing through, you tend to get a lot of villains to hate your guts. But there are some that travel between franchises too, so he has some constant enemies)

17

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1

(OoC: He's a 'taskmaster' of sorts. Of course, when he kills, he makes it a point that he had to kill them)

18

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1

(OoC: At this point, do I even have to answer that?)

19

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature

(OoC: I'm not a big fan of nekos and such creatures. He's a fully fledged human, anyway. Well..... As normal as you can get, when you travel between franchises)

19

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race

(OoC: Again, fully fledged human)

19

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3

(OoC: Get him to join them? No. Kill him? Oh, yes. But they're not organizations, per say)

19

11-20 Your OC is an interesting character with no overdose

(OoC: Your test may be flawed, like you said. Still, I guess that counts. Now, for the extra questions...)

Does other characters act different in your OC's presence? I don't mean just looking away, but totally twisting their personalities?

(OoC: Never)

Does your character have 3 or more well-developed talents that she didn't spend loooong time training?

(OoC: Nnnope. Pretty much everything he's good at has been something he's worked on for years)

Is your character having only either friends or enemies, and no people who just don't care?

(OoC: Why would there people who just don't care? Still, there are people who are between the line of friend and enemy, if that helps)

Did your character change lifes of many on her/his own?


(OoC: Not really. He saved a lot of lives, but did he leave a huge impact on any of them? Possibly, but only on a few)
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Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
Does any of this...really matter to the story at all?

No. None of what you answered does.

It's how you write it that makes all the difference.
You should not rely on these test if you're working on character development.
It will only turn you from taking chances with your skills.

You just playing the beat of someone else who reads bad writing...
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DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
(OoC: Who said I'm relying on it? I was only curious and did the test)
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:icontimewap1:
Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
I understand this.

I've taken stupid survey's before...

It's just that other people may not actually see that.

Just think of this as being an example, nothing more.
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Edited Jan 10, 2016
(OoC: I'll think of this as a waste of my time, 'cause that's what you did. You just wasted my time)
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:icontimewap1:
Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
Well it's not my problem what you choose to do with your time.

...I just think there are more constructive things to do...
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
(OoC: Then why're you still here?)
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Timewap1 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2016
I feel oblige to respond when you respond.
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Sachi-The-Ghost Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2
No.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4
They were brown but due to her devil fruit they turned red. Yeah.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a canon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?
Not in the One Piece universe, and thier not stronger than the all of the others, only the weaker of the crews (Nami, Usopp) etc.
4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
No.

5. Does your character have love interests in two or more people? +1
No.

6. Your character's past is:
a) Tragic, traumatic +3
b) Mysterious, unknown +4
c) Regular +0
C



7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
She appears to die but shes fine

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6
No.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

No.

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4
No.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
Some of her enemies but no one innocent.

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1
No.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature
No

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race
No.


15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC join them? +3
No.

RESULTS

I got 9 for my One Piece oc
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AtomicF0x Featured By Owner Edited Oct 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2
His hair is red. So no.

2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4
They're green, but they don't change. Answer is no.

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 If it's a canon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others'?
Powers he has. Pretty good ones too. Yes.

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
He's had people who've briefly thought about it at one time or another, but ultimately they decide not to think of him that way. No.

5. Does your character have love interests in two or more people? +1
He only really has eyes for one person. Too bad it probably has no chance of being reciprocated. No.

6. Your character's past is:
a) Tragic, traumatic +3
b) Mysterious, unknown +4
c) Regular +0

Bittersweet, but otherwise a normal past with no tragedies or traumas.

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
He never dies. Though I realize someone might see that in itself as a Sue trait. Answer is still no though.

8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6
He is only a part of a story/universe that I created. He wasn't made for any other pre-existing canons or stories. Answer is no.

9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4
Yes, they normally don't expect him to be a threat. Hey, you know what happens when you assume...

10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4
His parents want him to join them and carry on their legacy. Another group identifies with him and thinks he belongs with them. Yes.

11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
No, he only subdues and overpowers them when he has to.

12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1
Yes. We have his mentor and all his friends to thank for making sure he turned out a pretty good person.

13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1 point for every feature
Outwardly, he's just an normal, unassuming twerp with no plans to get in your evil way. Answer is no.

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1 point for every race
Not a mix, just an enhanced human thanks to his powers.

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3
He would mean the difference of prosperity or failure to the people looking to enlist his aid. People need him. Yes.

I got a 14 for this kid right here. But question 8 was a little confusing to be honest.
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2015
(OoC: Think it means "Does your OC become the main character of the universe immediately after it arrives into the events?")
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AtomicF0x Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for replying, first of all.

If the question is asking if he's the main character in an popular, pre-existing series like Pokemon or Harry Potter for example, then it doesn't count for him and he stays 14 on a technicality for this test.

If it means he's the main character of my own original story, then he's a 20. This is why I was confused.
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Edited Dec 4, 2015
(OoC: I mean if he replaces the already-main character and making them maybe a background/supporting character or something)
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:iconatomicf0x:
AtomicF0x Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Then I guess the answer is no.

Also, what is that OoC: thing you're putting in you comments?
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:icondrx-raven:
DrX-Raven Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2015
(OoC = Out of Character: If you see enough of my comments, I wouldn't need to explain anything)
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redwolfradolf Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2015
So my favorite OC is an 8, but I answered no to question 13, because having cat ears and tail is a common thing in her world.
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Yushicus Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2015
8. Most of Albast's traits come from the fact that he was built the way he is (ex. He was built with blue/orange hair, his hair is fake though because he's a robot), and I was starting to worry that his development was slowly making him less creative, but I think he's still fine, considering I got only 8.
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The-mute-artist Featured By Owner Edited Oct 4, 2015  Student Digital Artist
my oc is clumsy as hell and can even reach a tv remote let alone want to train


xD

1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2 

no just brown hair



2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4

no just brown

3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 
no regulaur

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2 

one but both are my oc

5. Does your character have love interests in two or more people? +1 

her wife that i created


6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, traumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) 
no

7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
no


8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6

no side character barely seen


9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

she too clumsy


10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4

no


11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
no


12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1
no


13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws

or such) +1 
no

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1

 
no

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3

no

i got...0 points
shes married and doesnt have time for a anime man 030
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:iconchinchillarose:
chinchillarose Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
My oc is a bit op but then again she trained at this and is afraid of a lot so does that count
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Narutoluverx Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2015  Student General Artist
I-I-I DONT CARE IF MY OC IS A MARY SUE I STILL LAHV HER WIFF ALL MY HEART ;w;
Btw, nice little test, it actually makes note of all the questions one should ask when dealing with an idealized OC. Though, it does lack questions, like every test of this sort, it does sort out the basics. But one that should be noteworthy is ' How beautiful is your OC, overly beautiful, realistic, godly etc, would be something good to add. 

My OC is the furthest point of realistic, it actually hurts to think about it. -yay-. Lets see these last few questions.. I haven't noticed if others act differently, but she often will depending on who she's around. Developed talents, none that didn't take her a millennium or so. More than a few people I've interacted with that were in the 'don't care' category. That's a stab right into the pride =w=; This last one... Hard to explain. She strives to change as many lives as she can, for the better of course.. But there's far too many to count that she has ended as well. 

Fighting roleplays never end well. AHK, I had fun with this.
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OrangeBloxxing Featured By Owner Edited Sep 27, 2015  Student General Artist
1:no, my oc's hair color is dirty blonde
2:no, my oc has the same eye/hair color as me in real life (dirty blonde hair, and blue eyes)
3:yes, he can hack/shut down computer terminals from a meter away
4:no, he is only ten years old after all
5:no, again only ten years old
6:regular, exept his vacation trip to liberty island of unova ended up with a victini following them back to johto.
7:no, he was born in johto and grew up in johto.
8:does it count if he was just going to be the main character of my comic in the first place?
9:no, he only faces foes that are equal in strength as he is
10:no, he doesn't have an arch nemesis, he does have a rival though
11:no, he hates killing
12:no, but he wishes he could (and no jirachi isn't going to grant his wish)
13:no, he only has human features
14:no, he is completely human
15:no
2-8 (depending on weather or not number 8 counts)
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Oddggear Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2015  Student General Artist
Huh, a healthy 12.
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:iconunikittythegreat:
UnikittyTheGreat Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2015  Student Artist
1. yep green 
2. mabey i forgot about the series for a while
3. powers from DA SUN!!! :D
4. oh damn how did you know
5. same reaction with number 4
6. B
7. i dont think so
8. duh
9. same with 7
10. same with 9
11. yeah
12. in the first book yep
13. what
14. what
15. yeah i totally hated them but now i think about it and i think they were good guys :O

total score: whats 9+10... 21.. thats my score..
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SkylarDream10 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist

1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2 

*yes* Brown And Yellow in same. 



2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4

*nope*


3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2 

Yeah she can do magic, and she is an Pegasus so *yes*

4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2 

*yes* one is soarin, and second rainbow blitz and last lightning star (I crated him by myself) 


5. Does your character have love interests in two or more people? +1 

*yes* Soarin, Rainbow blitz and Lightning Star


6. Your character's past is: a) Tragic, traumatic +3 b) Mysterious, unknown +4 c) 
Very *mysterious* 


7. Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5

*no*


8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6

i think *yes*


9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4

*no* , she clumsy XD


10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4

*yes* her insane and dark side


11. Did your character kill anyone? +1

*no* and she will never!


12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1

*yes*


13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws

or such) +1 

*not at all*

14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1

*nope*

15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3

*yes* 

Ok, I got 20 points (god dammit!)
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VeryShyHumanBeing Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
1. Yes (+2)
2. No
3. No
4. Nono
5. Nah
6. Regular
7. Nope
8. She already is... i mean... she is a fandomless OC... uhh, is that bad or..? 
9. Kind-of? Yes? (+4)
10. No-ish
11. No... do villains-ish-thingies count?
12. Yes (+1)
13. Well.. she is a elf.. so.. pointy ears count, yes? (+1)
14. Nope
15. No
So, 8 points... yay :3
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god-compIex Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Seriously I got 0 POINTS xD
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Gore-knife-horror Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2015
yes mine is not a mary sue maybe that's because I've worked on them for like 5 years...I wish I had a life like it got to the point where my characters talk to me threw my mind it's actually creepy
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KittyLikesToWrite Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2015
1. Does your character have unnatural hair color? (dyed hair does not count) +2
No, she has red-ish brown hair.
2. Did your characters hair/eyes changed color over time on their own? +4
Yes because she turned into a demon so her right eye is red
3. Does your character have any super/unnatural powers? +2
If it's a conon where many character have powers, are your character's stronger then most of the others?
Yes, she has powers... she is a demon after all...
4. Does your character have two or more people romantically interested in them? +2
Nope! but Vemados has a huge crush on her..
5. Does you character have love interests in two or more people? +1
No. But she is a huge tsundere and doesn't know she likes Vemados too..XD
6. Your character's past is:
a) Tragic, traumatic +3
b) Mysterious, unknown +4
c) Regular +0 7.
I guess it was answer A because she grew up with no parents just her brother but she always says she had a great past because they had so much fun together..
Was your character technically dead and then it managed to come back to life? +5
Well.. Yeah.. She's a freakin' demon!
8. Does your OC become the main character of the canon once it's there? +6
Nope! XD
9. Can your character fight down the stronger enemies? +4
Yup!
10. Does your character have it's own nemesis or somebody powerful after them? +4
No.. i think?
11. Did your character kill anyone? +1
..... YUP! (She's just a teansy bit insane..)
12. Did your character saved somebody's life? +1
She saved her big brothers life and Vemados' life!! yay! not an evil demon.. kinda...
13. Does your character have unnatural features? (Like cat tail, animal ears, some claws or such) +1
point for every feature
She has cat ears and a cat tail! i like Japanese stuff so i just had to give them to her..
14. Is your character a mix of races? (Vampire, mutant, werewolf, fairy etc.) +1
point for every race
Part demon part human part CAT!
15. Does two (or more) organizations fight to get your OC jon them? +3
No..
TOTAL:
22!!!!
21-30 Your OC is acceptable, but maybe you could fix some things
Im not changing anytin'
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